This story starts out very strong. All the technical aspects of the VN are top-tier: art, menus, music, formatting, editing. Marcus is a terrific character and his relationship with Tomasz has the strongest writing in the story. The opening is mysterious and exciting.
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After that, the story seems to lose direction. The relationship of Tomasz with his father doesn't feel real--they seem more like roommates. You'd never guess that Tomasz lost his mom if the story didn't spell it out. The scene with the fox woman at the store seems pointless, and Tomasz seems oddly nonchalant about the gangster-ish guys looking for a friend. I'd expect him to be scared and on the phone instantly to try to figure out who they were & what was going on.
There's a jarring genre-shift with the appearance of Dawid. We know Tomasz has mental problems and severe anxiety and several scary/overwhelming things have happened/are happening to him all at once. I'd expect him to be very suspicious or distant about Dawid's sudden reappearance, but instead he instantly turns into the protag of a (perfectly good) dating sim.
It feels like Tomasz is the focus of too many different narrative threads at once. The character gets no breathing room to develop because the story is constantly dragging him into yet a new plot.
Hopefully with greater length and more editing, most of these issues will naturally resolve themselves.
I mostly agree with your opinion. The change in the game's tone with Dawid is too much for me and a relationship like that really shouldn't be patched up over a dinner. Personally if someone did that to me and started blowing up my phone in an attempt to reconnect, id probably just block them.
What an incredible 1irst build! 😁 really blown away by what xou guys have created 😌 love the world, love the art, love the writing ☺️ Stunning, I can't wait for more~ 😋
Hey, I'm sorry you can't progress the game. I asked dev team to play through android and see if it crashes for anyone, and nobody did. I really have no idea what could cause it.
I do have suggestion: Clean the memory cache on your phone and turn off any background apps when playing. if that doesn't help I will be looking into fix but I won't be able to release it anytime soon.
The part with the lady? Yea i'd be pissed too if I waited 20 minutes for the store to open. And she dares buy a newspaper the mc dislikes, the horror lol
Curious if this vn will actually flesh out the horror supernatural aspect or will it be just oo spooky thing you dead/wake up.
Very impressed with the first build! Caught some Twin Peaks vibes from all that's happening. The characters all seem to have some depth to them already, with their little backstories and well-written interactions. The art is great, I'm especially ready to thoroughly investigate Raymond and Otto. Something that would be great to see in a feature build is a bit more backstory for Markus, with him being a detective in a detective story, moreover a close friend to main character. Looking forward to next parts of the story!
What a quality VN! The art style is beautiful and the main plot is catchy. Loved the characters and the subplots so far. You guys are doing a good job, hope to see more in the future...
Seem to have an issue with downloading via the itch app? It looks like there is nothing defined to install, has the "cannot read property 'build' of undefined
Just finished the first build and I love it! The characters are charming, the mystery keeps coming in a good way that makes us readers want to keep reading for more, totally worth the wait.
Oh! What a pity to see that a Mac version is not available for download. Will it be developed in the future or will the work remain only for PC and Android?
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Omg I wait this game so fuking long. Great job!
Hope it was worth the wait. We've been working on this VN since 2021. That's how long it's been for us :3
Markus is my favorite character!
This story starts out very strong. All the technical aspects of the VN are top-tier: art, menus, music, formatting, editing. Marcus is a terrific character and his relationship with Tomasz has the strongest writing in the story. The opening is mysterious and exciting.
[spoiler]
After that, the story seems to lose direction. The relationship of Tomasz with his father doesn't feel real--they seem more like roommates. You'd never guess that Tomasz lost his mom if the story didn't spell it out. The scene with the fox woman at the store seems pointless, and Tomasz seems oddly nonchalant about the gangster-ish guys looking for a friend. I'd expect him to be scared and on the phone instantly to try to figure out who they were & what was going on.
There's a jarring genre-shift with the appearance of Dawid. We know Tomasz has mental problems and severe anxiety and several scary/overwhelming things have happened/are happening to him all at once. I'd expect him to be very suspicious or distant about Dawid's sudden reappearance, but instead he instantly turns into the protag of a (perfectly good) dating sim.
It feels like Tomasz is the focus of too many different narrative threads at once. The character gets no breathing room to develop because the story is constantly dragging him into yet a new plot.
Hopefully with greater length and more editing, most of these issues will naturally resolve themselves.
I mostly agree with your opinion. The change in the game's tone with Dawid is too much for me and a relationship like that really shouldn't be patched up over a dinner. Personally if someone did that to me and started blowing up my phone in an attempt to reconnect, id probably just block them.
i loved it and wish it didnt end so soon. cant wait for the next update
Nice story so far about a rookie detective with horror in the mix.
The Super-Nova easter eggs is a nice touch.
I LOVED!
What an incredible 1irst build! 😁 really blown away by what xou guys have created 😌 love the world, love the art, love the writing ☺️ Stunning, I can't wait for more~ 😋
The VN crashes when I go investigate the noise.
I really want to know what happens! 😥
Edit: I'm on Android
Hey, I'm sorry you can't progress the game.
I asked dev team to play through android and see if it crashes for anyone, and nobody did.
I really have no idea what could cause it.
I do have suggestion:
Clean the memory cache on your phone and turn off any background apps when playing.
if that doesn't help I will be looking into fix but I won't be able to release it anytime soon.
I hope it will work! good luck.
Maybe check your phone updates or clear all data from the app maybe uninstalling and reinstalling would help androids are weird!
Ok this kinda worked, now it crashes when (spoilers)
He gets impaled by a hand and blinks(?) three times.
Is... IS THAT AN EYEBALL!?
what phone do u use ?
I use a tablet
F in the chat Lenovo?
What Android version? It can be possible for Android to kill the process that reaches the limit of a single app can take.
The one that's out? I don't know what you mean by that.
Your device’s Android version. You can search on the internet how to get the Android version.
The part with the lady? Yea i'd be pissed too if I waited 20 minutes for the store to open. And she dares buy a newspaper the mc dislikes, the horror lol
Curious if this vn will actually flesh out the horror supernatural aspect or will it be just oo spooky thing you dead/wake up.
Ngl Karol kinda got me flustered on sight, I'm like 2 seconds into the game and I really hope his character isn't bad xD.
Well that was a fun start so far, man there have been so many new vns with a lot of promise recently.
Very impressed with the first build! Caught some Twin Peaks vibes from all that's happening. The characters all seem to have some depth to them already, with their little backstories and well-written interactions. The art is great, I'm especially ready to
thoroughlyinvestigate Raymond and Otto. Something that would be great to see in a feature build is a bit more backstory for Markus, with him being a detective in a detective story, moreover a close friend to main character. Looking forward to next parts of the story!Btw, first, I thought the game was called "Shining", but then found out that I was a bit off, and it's actually "Shadows".
Yeah, Cienie /chain-yay/ does sound like "shining" or "shiny", but you're right. It has a completely opposite meaning.
What a quality VN! The art style is beautiful and the main plot is catchy. Loved the characters and the subplots so far. You guys are doing a good job, hope to see more in the future...
Rotshild the goat helping out with the Android port! 🥹
very exciting first build! Love all the boys, and the scares were cooked just right.
Looking forward to more!
I hope android build works out, cus it doesn't work with joiplay (pc on android vn emu)
Seem to have an issue with downloading via the itch app? It looks like there is nothing defined to install, has the "cannot read property 'build' of undefined
I never tried the app, but could you try again? i forgot to check specific systems for each file. Might've been why.
works now, thanks!
Just finished the first build and I love it! The characters are charming, the mystery keeps coming in a good way that makes us readers want to keep reading for more, totally worth the wait.
Literally incredible lol I'm so hooked. This VN has already scared the shit out of me and I love it so much.
Oh! What a pity to see that a Mac version is not available for download. Will it be developed in the future or will the work remain only for PC and Android?
Hey there, Just uploaded it! I hope you enjoy.
Thank you very much!!!
I had been following the project on Twitter for a while and was really curious to read the first build!